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The Lottery Does More Good Than Harm
       The lottery, a kind of numbered ticket, is sold to people among whom a few are picked out by chance to give a prize. Some people think it has some negative effect on the society, but in my opinion, it surely does much more good than harm.
      Those who consider lottery harmful to the society may have the idea that the lottery is just a kind of gamble, h is true that there are some accidental factors in lottery, but this doesn"t mean it is a gamble. The main difference between lottery and gamble lies in the purpose. Those who buy a lottery ticket mainly aim at repaying the society while those who take part in the gamble are tempted by money.  Hence, the lottery will not do much harm as some people think it will. On the contrary, it does more good.
     First, the lottery offers a way to accumulate the wealth to form a fund. The little effort done by every single person will make up a big one because of the large number of people that join it. Thus, a fund can be formed to help the children whose family is too poor to pay for their education, or to promote the development of the destitute areas.
     Second, the lottery also makes it possible for a person to repay the society. Nowadays, what individuals think is not only what others can do for him or her, but also what he or she can do for others. The advent of the lottery offers such a way. As a result, the lottery advocates a spirit of helping each other, and thus improves the interpersonal relations as well as makes our society more harmonious.
     In short, the lottery can do much more good than harm and it will be more popular with the increasing number of people who realize the benefits brought by it.

简  评
    马臻同学的这篇作文简洁明快,说理清楚。作者首先在第二段点出了彩票与赌博的区别,从而建立了立论的基础。然后作者从两个方面分别论述了彩票的优点,结构清晰完整。
    作者的语言功底也相当出色,定语从句,状语从句等复杂句式的使用准确和谐。将每一段的主题句都放在第一句,使结构清晰明白;各段的支持句(supporting sentence)展开比较自然,使得论证有理有据,令人信服。
    全文详略得当,言简意丰,绝不拖泥带水,这是本文的又一优点。
    (点评教师:孙东云)

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